First of all, you need to use lighter colors in your TIAS. I can hardly make out the words in the red and blue highlights.
Second, how old is this girl? If it's someone your age, would she really cry at being rejected by her friends? Mia, would you cry if this happened to you? Let's make it more believable. Why does the girl reject the boy? It's not like he's trying to be her boyfriend right? He just wants to be friends. Why does he get rejected? If you can make it so she gets rejected for the same reason, then maybe she can see the error of her ways in dealing with the boy.
Have you really taken a look at the lyrics though? It seems to be talking about one person saying he's going to be there for his friend no matter what. It's also about love though because he calls her "baby" and "I just wanna give you love" so he does seem to want to be with her. Maybe she doesn't see it right away or is scared but he's telling her to come along with him, how he's going to set her free.
Take a closer look at the lyrics and see if you can work on this some more to make it match better.
For my fourth quarter project I am going to be working with Mia Thompson on a music video for One Call Away.