I like it but as we discussed in class, make the girl's friends take a picture of the boy coming over to talk to her. They can tease her by saying, "Mia's new BF!" or something like that and then the other girls can make mean comments about him. That's what the boy sees from his friends that makes him sad. Then this girl sees the same thing later that night in her room and gets upset at her so called "friends." That will make this flow better.
For my fourth quarter project I am going to be working with Mia Thompson on a music video for One Call Away.