This is pretty good! At times the story doesn't totally connect the dots but you can kinda tell what's happening. Your shots are well done but be careful of breaking that 180 rule. Erik, you've done that before with the PSA remember? If you have a character coming in from right to left and he's facing the left, in your close up next you have to keep him looking to the left. Overall a pretty good project. If you had the time to do another version, I'm sure you could make this clearer and tighter. 3.5 points or a high B.
For my fourth quarter project I am going to be working with Mia Thompson on a music video for One Call Away.