As mentioned in class, swap around points 3 and 4. It makes more sense to talk about the organization rebuilding it before you talk about how it attracts tourists and residents. Also open with a good sound bite from an interview instead of a VO. Get something that will grab my attention and hold it so I don't change the channel.
When you go into point 2 and introduce us to the heiau, I need to know more than it's on the south shore of Kauai. Tell me exactly where it is located, how big it is, etc. Point 2 also needs more info on what they've done to restore it. When did they start? How long has it taken? What did they have to do? How many volunteers did it take? What else needs to be done? That needs to be included in point 2. Right now you don't have enough info to support it.
Point 4 is also very weak. Maybe this is where some of that info that I asked about in point 2 could go. I need more info about this special group of people.
Point 5 is already kind of talked about earlier. I think you can take the sound bite there and move it above. Maybe your last point could be their future plans and how residents can help them?
This needs a lot of work. Overall it's a weak story with little information to back up your points. Let's keep working at it.
Write something about yourself. No need to be fancy, just an overview.