This script has evolved over time through your drafts and just having more than one draft this quarter is a huge improvement over what you both did last quarter. Kudos to you both for getting on this much earlier so that you had the time to get some feedback and make some changes. Your script is definitely better because of it so good job! You do a good job in highlighting the problem we have here in Hawaii with us having to import most of our food. That's a serious issue and something that will come back to haunt us one day when a disaster strikes. We have to be more self sufficient and I think farmers markets are one way to get more fresh produce out to the local community. This story is about the farmers markets though and you don't have enough info here about them. When did they start? You mention that there are 15 of them around the island but you fail to tell me where even one of them is located. Is there a cost to farmers to sell their items? Is it free? If it is, how do they do that? Does the county organize them? The state? Another organization? What are the hours and what days of the week are they open? I think that's the biggest issue for me in this script. I want more info about them. The rest of your points are good. This is a 3.6 or an A-. Nice job!
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